At the beginning of Term 3, Room 5 had to write about our holidays. I decided to write about a car crash.
Reflection:
I think I was good at using long and detailed words.
I found it difficult to come up with words that are very interesting and captivates the reader.
Maybe next time I could make my story a bit more descriptive and longer.
Kia ora Sam, I really liked your 'Deconstructed recount' blog post because I liked the way you described your holiday and that you were remembering the memories from your break. I also enjoyed your post because you explained every little detail and when you said 'The rain dripped slowly across the windscreen as two small headlights appeared through the misty fog,' I could see a picture of that in my head. Maybe next time you could use two spaces after every full stop and paragraphs. Did you really nearly get in a car crash? Nice work Sam, keep up the great effort! Ms Peters.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Ms Peters, Sam here. Thank you for commenting on my blog post about my Deconstructed holiday recount. Thank you for your feedback and feed forward. To answer your question yes I did almost get into a car crash during the school holidays. Catch ya later!
DeleteHi Samantha my name is Indi and I go to Oturu school in NZ. I am 10 years old and I really like your writing, it is really good and interesting I like the the start it is really calming. Keep the good work up. Bye
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